TOPIC: body piercing
BAD: Body piercing is popular among kids nowadays.
BETTER: Body piercing among contemporary youth represents the latest form of rebelling against authority that previous generations manifested in smoking, getting tattoos, and wearing mini-skirts.
TOPIC: female musicians
BAD: Female musicians are getting more popular.
BETTER: During the past five years, musical artists like Sheryl Crow, Alanis Morisette, and Jewel have solidified a place for women's music on the top ten charts.
TOPIC: news coverage of military action
BAD: News coverage of military actions undermines their seriousness.
BETTER: By featuring highlights of air strikes and peace-keeping missions on the news, television producers reduce them to the status of popular entertainment and undermine the audience's appreciation of the seriousness of military actions.
*Stanford.edu
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